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Aspiring Classical Music Composer

by jon
(hawaii)

Hi my name is Jon Shimabukuro and I composed a song that I named "Dancing on the Moon by Jon Shimabukuro". I uploaded it on You Tube. I would love for you to watch it and tell me what you think of it. Thank you for your time.






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Apr 27, 2011
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thanks Jon!
by: Anonymous

Jon, I enjoyed listening to your composition. The recording quality may not have been the greatest, and the guitar may have been a bit out of tune, but these things are of little importance.

You clearly have knowledge of music written for the guitar. The multi-voicing is very nice throughout- the recurring pattern of the bass note, answered by the treble- and it's very pleasant to listen to.

My constructive criticism would run along the lines that the piece is- for me- a bit unbalanced, in that there isn't enough of a melody: I know there is a tune, but to me it seemed much more simply like an extended ostinato pattern.

For me, the greatest difficulty in composition is not the elements themselves, but in fusing them all together in a way that seems natural and inevitable. What you have is already very nice, but I think you can make it even greater if you can come up with a distinctive melody that goes together seamlessly with what you have already written.

Keep it up!

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